Susan Berliner
www.susanberliner.com
Welcome to my weird world!

Blog

This blog is by Susan Berliner, author of the supernatural thrillers "DUST," "Peachwood Lake," "The Disappearance," "Corsonia," and the short story collection, "The Sea Crystal and Other Weird Tales." If you have any comments or suggestions, please contact me.

Tech no-how – June 20, 2018

If you follow this blog, you know I'm not a fan of technology and this week, I had to fill out forms to qualify for a discount with the company that prints my books. It hasn't been easy.

First, I had to sign a contract. Thankfully, the company provided a video with instructions—so I just made one mistake that I had to redo.

Then I needed to price my books in all the company's markets. For this step, they provided a second video. This video featured a woman advising publishers to set low prices to entice buyers. Big help—not!

When I checked the five books the company has printed for me, I found all had international prices. But, no, the rep wrote back. Two books needed prices in three of their newer markets, which hadn't been offered when the books were published. But although I asked, he didn't tell me how I was supposed to add prices to markets that weren't shown in my listings. Instead, his email directed me to the woman-talking-low-prices worthless video.

After two more emails asking for specific directions on how to add the prices, the rep finally gave me the necessary information—and it was very simple. So why couldn't they have explained this in a video—or told me in an earlier email?

Now let's see if I get the discount I've been fighting so hard for.

*            *            *

Saying it again – June 15, 2018

Even though After the Bubbles is "finished" and being formatted, I still find things to change every time I reread the book. At this stage, it's mostly punctuation marks (commas and omitted quotation marks) and words or phrases that I unintentionally repeat in the next sentence or two. It amazes me that these repetitions got past me the other zillion times I read the manuscript.

Here are a few examples:

* She'll just move to another side of the house. Then I had another thought...

* The small street was full of smashed cars...Blaine navigated his way past a smashed gray truck...

* It was too late...It was too late for second thoughts.

How did I revise these repeated words and phrases? To find out, you'll have to read the book.

*            *            *

A sad farewell – June 10, 2018

I was looking forward to working with Dawn, my graphic designer, on the cover of my new doomsday book, After the Bubbles, starting Monday, June, 11th. But that's not happening.

A few days ago, I learned that Dawn passed away in late April. I knew she was disabled and had serious health issues, but her death still came as a shock.

Although Dawn and I never met and came from diverse backgrounds—she was from West Virginia mining country and I'm from the Bronx—she was more than a terrific cover designer; she was my friend.

That's not to say we always got along. We argued often about elements for my covers (she designed The Disappearance, Corsonia, and The Sea Crystal and Other Weird Tales)—which pieces of art to use, which fonts, which colors. Dawn could be stubborn about a cover, but as I sometimes had to remind her, it was my book.

She was an intensely private person. I knew her for six years and have no idea what she looked like. When I called her cell phone, her raspy voice told me to "Please leave your message for private residence."

But thanks to the Internet, everyone can still see many of Dawn's wonderful covers on her website and Facebook page.

I've hired a new cover designer, who I'm sure will do a great job with my book. But I'll always remember Dawn. R.I.P.

 *            *            *

The book is finished, but... – June 5, 2018

I sent After the Bubbles, Book One of The Touchers, to the formatter, which means the doomsday book is finished. I'm now proofing the first formatted version, looking for errors.

However, as I read the book, in addition to typos, I found other things to change. Most of the revisions were minor—repeated words, unnecessary words, comma additions or subtractions.

But something bothered me: I felt one of the minor characters needed more description. Although he makes a brief appearance early, his scene is integral to the story, and yet I say very little about him. However, after mulling it over, I decided to leave the scene alone because I think the reader will be able to figure out the character's essence without the additional words.

*            *            *

Is the book "finished"? – May 31, 2018

The simple answer to the question above is "No." Most authors will tell you that a book is never really done because it can always be made better. A word, a phrase—
something can be improved. But if authors waited until their books were perfect, we'd never have anything to read so, at some point, authors have to say, "Enough!"

I've reached that point. On my last (and final) reread, I changed some repeated words, found stronger synonyms, added or removed commas, fixed a few typos—but didn't make any important revisions. That means After the Bubbles, Book One of The Touchers is basically finished.

It's about time!

*            *            *

Getting it right – May 26, 2018

I woke up at 3:30 am Saturday and couldn't fall back to sleep because I kept thinking about a scene in After the Bubbles, the doomsday novel I'm readying for publication. The scene has been bothering me for a while: Something about it just didn't feel right. It's a small but significant early incident, involving my heroine's neighbor and a rifle. But I was having trouble figuring out what was disturbing me.

Finally—at about 5 am—I realized the problem, a subtle one—and later in the morning I fixed it, reversing some of the action and dialogue.

This is the kind of thing that nobody else would probably notice wasn't logical. But even so, I needed to get it right.

*            *            *

Finding sneaky typos – May 21, 2018

I'm in the final reread (I hope!) of my doomsday thriller, After the Bubbles, Book One of The Touchers series. Happily, I'm not finding many changes to make or many mistakes to correct. But I am finding sneaky typos.

Why do I call these typos "sneaky"? Because they're subtle—the kind that fool your eyes into thinking they're not mistakes. Here are three examples:

"or let any anyone from outside touch you."
(I missed this typo many times, ignoring "any" and just seeing "anyone.")

""Please stop," he whispered.
(The double quotation marks are obvious here—but much harder to spot when they're camouflaged in lots of text.)

"If no one here, then..."
(My eyes assumed "one" was the possessive "one's.")

*            *            *

Switching to Plan B - May 16, 2018

I'd planned to blog about my progress with After the Bubbles, my soon-to-be-published doomsday novel, but life got in the way.

Yesterday afternoon, we had a severe thunderstorm--heavy rain, wind, thunder, and lightning. During an intense part of the storm, our power went off. Since this happens frequently in my neighborhood, I figured it was just a routine outage. However, when I checked outside, I discovered this was not the case.

Lightning had struck a foundation maple tree, slamming a huge limb onto part of our driveway and our neighbors' lawn--and taking all our electrical wires down with it. The situation could have been worse. Our new Subaru is usually parked in that spot, but my husband had driven the car to the gym that afternoon.

Now we wait for the electric utility (NYSEG) to reattach our wires and the landscape company to remove the tree limb. But with many outages affecting more people than just one family, we're not at the top of the utility's to-do list. At least our downed wires aren't posing a hazard. A NYSEG worker passing our house this morning said the wires aren't live. But he didn't sound optimistic about our power being restored any time soon. Fingers crossed he's wrong.

(I'm writing this post at the computer center in town where Ed, the computer maven, is still helping me set up the new laptop.)

*            *            *

Computer concerns continued – May 10, 2018

So I purchased a laptop from Office Depot, a company I'd never ordered from before, because they offered the model I wanted at a good price. The deal got even better when a 20% off digital coupon flashed on the screen while computer maven Ed (see May 5 post), was checking out the model with me and he emailed me the coupon.

However, when I was ordering the laptop, Shane, the Office Depot rep, told me the coupon wasn't valid for that particular model. "It makes no sense," I complained. "How can't it not be valid for this laptop, since the coupon appeared while I was checking out this model?" After I argued more and got nowhere, I demanded to speak to a supervisor (always a good tactic), and finally got the coupon. Shane told me the laptop would be delivered Tuesday, May 8—and that information was confirmed via email.

Unfortunately, Office Depot doesn't use a major delivery service like FedEx or UPS. They have their own trucks. On Tuesday morning, I checked the shipping notification and my laptop was supposed to arrive between 8 am and 7 pm. When I didn't receive the computer—and the delivery time wasn't updated—I called customer service and Queenette (love that name!) attempted, without success, to reach the drivers. After I explained I had an appointment to set up the laptop on Wednesday, Queenette left an "urgent" email for me to get delivery Wednesday morning by 10 am.

When I didn't receive the computer, I called Office Depot Wednesday morning at 10:15 and Rachel told me the deliverers "ran out of time yesterday" and the laptop would be delivered by noon. Of course, that didn't happen. Karen, the next rep I spoke to, told me the drivers had "attempted to deliver Tuesday, but the building was closed."

"Closed!" I shouted. "It's a home, not a business—and the front door was open!" Again, I asked for a supervisor.

Supervisor Mary told me delivery was scheduled for Wednesday, but she couldn't speak to a driver, just the dispatcher, who promised a 2 pm delivery, which would give me just enough time to rush to town and work with computer maven, Ed.

But the computer wasn't delivered at 2:00. The next rep I spoke to was Phil ("Are you located in the Philippines?" I couldn't resist asking. "Yes.") Phil from the Philippines checked with a supervisor and was told my computer would be delivered between 2 pm and 4 pm.

It came at 4:15, delivered in a small unmarked white van. The deliverers, wearing Office Depot tee shirts, said they weren't the Tuesday crew, just rectifying the situation. The computer was in a huge beat-up carton, but the manufacturer's box inside was fine and the laptop seems to work.

I had complained to Phil from the Philippines that I deserved some compensation for Office Depot's delivery foul-up and he called me back Wednesday, promising a partial refund. I'm not holding my breath, but will mention it here if I get it.

*            *            *

Computer concerns – May 5, 2018

I need a new computer. Although I love my Dell XP, it's 12 years old and obsolete. It's also slow and crashes all the time. And in mid-June, the company that prints my books will no longer support my browser—just when I'll be working with the cover designer on After the Bubbles.

But for me, buying a computer is scary. What model I get? How do I set up the computer? How do I save and transfer my programs?

A friend suggested I talk to Ed, who runs a computer lab in town. So I talked to him and he was wonderfully helpful, giving me specifics to look for. He suggested I get a laptop because they are so portable. But I like a desktop because of the bigger keyboard and monitor. Although Ed explained that I could use a laptop as a desktop—with my old keyboard and screen—I insisted on a desktop and researched models.

Then I had lunch with my author friend, Linda, and she said I was crazy to buy a desktop. She had a new laptop, used it as a desktop, and loved it. "When it crashed, I just picked it up, and brought it in to be repaired," she explained.

Deciding she and Ed were right, I changed direction and researched laptops, finding a computer that perfectly matched Ed's parameters. When Ed approved of my choice, I purchased it and he will help set up the laptop and transfer my programs. I only hope I can still use Word 2000.

*            *            *

Revising the book—again – April 30, 2018

I just received feedback from a pre-publication reader of After the Bubbles, the first book of my two-part doomsday series, The Touchers, and the reader had some excellent suggestions. Unfortunately, whenever I make revisions to improve the manuscript it means that the book still isn't "finished."

This reader felt the characters didn't show enough fear in scary situations or enough empathy at tragic events. So today I added tears and dialogue to better express these feelings.

The reader also questioned other behaviors that I didn't agree with after rereading the scenes. But it led me to reanalyze various plot points—and that's a good thing.

This reader did make one small, but important, correction: I carelessly wrote that Star Trek's Mr. Spock had big ears and, of course, the Vulcan's ears were pointy.

*            *            *

If it sounds too good to be true... – April 25, 2018

I recently received an email from a "Senior Business Development Associate" who wanted to discuss a "partnership" involving my first novel, DUST.

I've been contacted many times about "wonderful" marketing opportunities—and when I checked them out, they've always been scams. But this one was different. Although I searched, I couldn't find any scam connection. The Business Associate's email address linked to a new literary emagazine that looked quite good—and the emagazine was owned by a reputable company.

Of course, the woman wanted money from me for our "partnership." But in return, she would purchase copies of DUST and my other four books (that her researchers had deemed "sellable") and place them in 5 retail book stores—on my own shelf with a nameplate (a nice vanity touch) promising to sell 200 copies per store in 5-6 months, for which I'd receive all the profits. I'd also get an ad in their magazine and a personal publicist to handle interviews, signing events, etc.

But wait, there's more! As part of our "partnership," she would create a new website for me—transferring everything from my existing website (a lot of stuff!)—and I would incur no additional fees ever for maintenance or hosting. Wow!

Here's the kicker: If they didn't hit their "forecasted numbers"—or if I wasn't satisfied—I would get a full refund.

"What's there to lose?" the woman asked.

It did sound wonderful, especially when she made every change I requested and sent me revised proposals.

So why didn't I accept this "partnership"?

I asked for references—both for the ad campaign and website design. She gave me a few links to websites (very basic ones with no proof her company had designed them) and books, but I could find just one author's email address. I contacted the woman, a poet and discovered that this company hadn't done an ad campaign or a website for her. The emagazine had accepted some of her poems—and hadn't paid her.

I told the Business Associate about this reference and she mentioned a problem with the poet's PayPal account, which she said had been rectified. However, the poet told me today that she still hadn't been paid.

When I repeated my request for references, the Business Associate simply emailed me the same worthless links again. So I rejected the "partnership." If it sounds too good to be true...

*            *            *

Making improvements – April 20, 2018

I'm taking another short break from editing my doomsday thriller, After the Bubbles, while I await feedback about the book from a valued reader. During the interim, I'm working on peripheral material for the novel, the most important of which is the back-cover blurb. (See April 15 post)

Every day, I reread the blurb, trying to determine how I can improve it. I knew something was missing, but I didn't know what it was. Yesterday, however, I finally figured it out: The blurb needed a middle paragraph—sandwiched between the brief plot summary—to describe the catastrophe.

Since this is an end-of-the-world story, the reader should have a general idea of the disaster—and the newly-inserted second paragraph provides that information. But the blurb's still not done.

*           *           *

Perfecting the blurb – April 15, 2018

In addition to rereading and editing After the Bubbles, Book One of The Touchers, my doomsday series, I'm doing the other necessary things to prepare the novel for publication. This weekend, I worked on the book's blurb.

Other than the novel itself, the blurb—the back-cover copy—is probably the most important element. In addition to appearing on the back of the paperback edition, it's the book description readers see when they check out the novel on Amazon, on my website, or on other Internet locations. That brief summary had better be good because if it doesn't grab readers, they won't grab the book.

I've been perfecting this 150-word blurb for months and it's still not finished. But it is getting better.

*            *            *

Repetition removal – April 10, 2018

I'm again rereading and editing After the Bubbles, Book One of The Touchers, my doomsday series. Although the manuscript is getting better, I'm still finding many things to change.

In addition to typos, other mistakes, and awkward phrasing, I've noticed some unnecessary dialogue repetition. Too many of my characters say, "Look!" or "Yeah" when they start to speak. Instead of "Look!," the character can sometimes point to what he or she sees; instead of "Yeah," the person can occasionally just nod.

I don't mind reusing important words or phrases in dialogue, but when I become conscious of repetition, I know I'm overusing the terms. Yeah, I am.

*            *            *

Back to the book – April 5, 2018

Letting the book sit worked for me. In my previous post (March 31), I wrote that I was taking a little time off from editing my end-of-world thriller, After the Bubbles, Book One of The Toucher series, in order to approach the novel from a new perspective.

I'm nearly finished with this reread and I've noticed several plot errors that I missed the first 20+ times I've read the manuscript. These aren't major errors; they're small, subtle mistakes. Nevertheless, they are things I should have seen and corrected in one of the previous rereads. But at least I saw them now.

And although After the Bubbles isn't "finished" yet, it's greatly improved. That's encouraging.

*            *            *

Letting it sit - March 31, 2018

If you follow this blog, you know I've been working on After the Bubbles, the first book of my doomsday series, The Touchers, for many years. Since I hope to finally publish this novel in late spring/early summer, I've been editing it nearly full-time.

However, reading the same thing over and over becomes tedious and isn't always effective. So after my last reread, I decided I needed a break. As the quote says, I let the manuscript sit while I did something else: I reread my short stories. Although I won't be publishing this collection until late 2018 at the earliest, I was anxious to reread and edit the 13 stories, organize them, and write a rough introduction.

It was a good break. I'll have a fresh perspective next week when I return to After the Bubbles.

*            *            *

Contest comments – March 26, 2018

I just entered my short story in an online contest. It's the first time I've written a story specifically for a contest and, even if I don't win, it's been a worthwhile experience.

Why? I liked the discipline of having to write a story under 1,000 words, something I haven't done. All my published stories are at least 2,000 words, some much longer.

I also liked the topic—a horror tale about a sole survivor on a deserted island. And even if I am a contest winner, I can still publish the print version of the story so "The Island" will be in included in my next collection. (And if I don't win, the little horror tale will be part of my ebook too.)

                                                         *            *            *

Multitasking – March 21, 2018

Currently, I'm juggling three writing-related projects. First, I'm making corrections/
revisions in my doomsday manuscript, After the Bubbles, the first book of The Touchers series. Although the novel is much improved, it still isn't "finished."

Now that I've written my twelfth short story, I'm arranging the dozen tales into a workable order. Unlike The Sea Crystal and Other Weird Tales, these stories can't be presented in the order in which I wrote them. Why? Because I have two long tales—nearly novellas. One will lead off the book and the other will be the closing story. Also, I want to separate genres so that tales of horror, humor, sci-fi, time travel, etc. don't follow each other. It's like piecing together a jigsaw puzzle.

Lastly, I've written a little horror story for an online contest. I've completed and edited the first draft, but the story needs some fine-tuning.

*            *            * 

Change of direction – March 16, 2018

A few days ago, I wrote the first scene of a short story I intend to enter in a fun contest. But that night, I woke up realizing my opening didn't work: This is supposed to be a horror story and my opening was mild, not at all horrible.

So I changed direction, rewriting the opening scene to make it much more gory. This change doesn't impact the rest of the story since my premise (a gruesome twist) remains the same. But the new horror in the beginning makes this tale truly horrible.

*            *            *

Deleting the boring – March 11, 2018

Between power outages caused by Nor'easters, I've been editing the manuscript of After the Bubbles, the title of Book One of The Touchers series. As I've posted before, it's disheartening to find so many problems with this doomsday thriller, especially since I've been working on it for a zillion years.

A major issue is my tendency to end scenes with unimportant, unexciting, and often repetitive text that doesn't move the story forward. I've been crossing out these boring passages, which may be the result of having taken such a long time to write this book. Whatever the reason, I'm ruthlessly deleting those dull portions and, hopefully, improving the novel.

                                                        *            *            *

Frost bytes – March 6, 2018

Take it from me: Living in a house with no power in 20-degree temperatures is no fun. Thanks to Nor'easter #1 last week, I experienced frozen life from Friday night to Monday night. You can imagine how thrilled we East Coasters are that we've got Nor'easter #2 on Wednesday, which means many of us could easily lose power again.

During the outage, I wasn't able to get on the Internet because I don't have an iPhone. Why don't I have this wondrous communications device? Because I'm kind of a technophobe. In fact my hospitable daughter—who took our cold family into her warm home—chastised me for my phone-avoidance, calling me a kind of an "Amish person."

One thing I learned from my Antarctic experience (we slept in our unheated house Sunday night when the thermometer dipped to 45 inside) is that it's difficult to be creative (write, edit, etc.) when you are freezing. I got nothing done until I went to my daughter's house. There I was able to do a little work on my new freelance project.

I hope I—and my neighbors—don't have to relive this frozen tundra experience in the coming days. But if you don't see me online, you'll know why.

*            *            *

Contest creation – March 1, 2018

I've got a new contest on the website and this one is linked to my forthcoming doomsday novel, After the Bubbles, the first book of The Touchers series that I've been working on forever.

I've been holding off with this contest until now because I'd like it to coincide with the publication of the novel—and After the Bubbles isn't quite finished yet. However, I've just reserved a week with the graphic artist to work on the cover and am (sort-of) confident the book will be ready in late June.

Despite the topic, my new end-of-the-world contest isn't depressing; it's fun and simple. To check it out, please go to the Contest page.

*            *            *

The muse hits – February 24, 2018

I'd been thinking about entering a short story contest, but couldn't come up with a clever concept—until I took a shower yesterday morning. I don't know about everyone else, but I get some of my best ideas while showering—probably because no one bothers me there.

Now all I have to do is write this very short story (1,000 word limit). That's the next hurdle; all my stories are longer than 1,000 words so this little horror tale has to unfold quickly. But I'm looking forward to the challenge when I write the story, hopefully next week. Before that, maybe I'll get additional inspiration in the shower.

*            *            *

The dreaded apostrophe – February 19, 2018

If you read this blog, you know that each year at this time I write an apostrophe-related post because of many misspelled headlines in holiday sales ads.

But first, a short history lesson: When I was a child, in February we celebrated the birthdays of two presidents: George Washington's Birthday (February 22) and Abraham Lincoln's Birthday (February 12), with a day off from school for each holiday. However, in 1971, to provide 3-day weekends, a new holiday was created on the third Monday of February to honor Washington and in most states, Lincoln.

This redesigned February holiday has became known as "Presidents' Day," the apostrophe signifying that we celebrate more than one president (not President's Day, which would honor just one leader). It's also not "Presidents Day" because it's a "Day for the Presidents," which requires the possessive apostrophe.

Every year, I check newspapers, the Internet, and TV to see which companies have misspelled Presidents' Day in their ads. This February, I noticed a major improvement in the number of "President's Day" misspellings. I only saw a few smaller retailers like Corner Furniture in the Bronx, advertise a "President's Day Sale."

However, major companies still leave out the apostrophe. Shame on Dell Computers ("Presidents Day Deals") and Macy's ("Presidents Day Sale"), along with Hyundai with its prime-time TV commercial for "Presidents Day Sales Event."

There's a clever way for advertisers to avoid the apostrophe issue altogether: Change the headline wording. In the metro NY area, many car dealerships take this approach by offering a "Presidential Savings Event!" or "Presidential Price Bash" or "Presidential Weekend Specials!"

I'll look forward to next year's holiday headlines. (Notice the apostrophe placement because I'm just referring to one year.)

*            *            * 

Setting scenario – February 14, 2018

Most of my stories are set in the real world, but occasionally one of them involves a mythical place. That's the case with "Wrong Road," the story I'm currently writing.

Sometimes the location isn't important, but in a story like "Wrong Road," it's crucial. Since the protagonist travels from a real place to mythical Bench Corners, the real location has to be believable. This week, I researched roads and locations and changed a vague highway reference to Route 35 and chose Jamestown, Ohio, a small village near Dayton, as the character's home.

The story works better with Wendy traveling from a "real" place, even though she winds up in an unreal location.

*            *            *

Killing my darlings – February 9, 2018

 Faulkner quote

Like all novelists, I often have to kill off characters I like or even love. But my "darlings" are not just the characters I create—they're also the words themselves.

When I write material that I keep, I either like what I've written or rewrite the words until I like them. And when I'm editing a manuscript that I've read many times, I'm familiar with the words and fond of them. That's why it's so difficult to destroy those words.

I've just finished rereading The Touchers (Book One), the first part of my doomsday series and so far I've deleted nearly two thousand words because they're repetitive or unnecessary.

But now I'm making a big move—deleting an entire scene of nearly five hundred words. Why? Because words in a novel should either propel the action forward or develop characters and this scene does neither. It simply reviews the events of the previous scene without adding anything new. So goodbye precious words, aka my "darlings."

*            *            *

Dialogue deletions – February 4, 2018

"Dialogue...should eliminate the routine exchanges of ordinary conversation.
– Twitter quote

I retweeted the above quote because it's true: Dialogue is not conversation. Although the words people speak in books should mimic conversation, real speech tends to be rambling, repetitive, and include meaningless words and phrases like, "well," "you know," "um," and "er."

Dialogue should either further the action or provide insight to a character's personality. It doesn't need extraneous words. That's why I've been deleting snippets of my characters' dialogue in my doomsday manuscript, The Touchers (Book One). (See January 30th post)

As I write, my characters take over and speak their dialogue to me, which I then transcribe. But when I reread what they've said—and I've written—I often have to delete words because the characters talk too much, if like you know what I mean.

*            *            *

Word weeding – January 30, 2018

I'm currently editing my doomsday thriller, The Touchers (Book One). In addition to making major fixes (see January 25th post below), I've been weeding out unnecessary words—lots of them.

It's disturbing that a manuscript I've worked on for so many years still contains so many extraneous words—mostly in dialogue. Although we use unnecessary words in our conversations, characters' dialogue shouldn't mimic real speech. Here are some examples of my changes:

Before: "You're going to have to talk."
After: "You have to talk."

Before: "Erin, please go do your assignment."
After: "Erin, please do your assignment."

Before: "I'm going to write down everything we have to get and make a map of the layout of the store..."
After: "I'm going to write down everything we need and make a map of the store..."

Before: "I'm going to get a couple of big garbage bags..."
After: "I'll get a couple of big garbage bags..."

Before: "I just need enough time to be able to get inside the kitchen..."
After: "I just need enough time to get inside the kitchen..."

Before: "Do you think they could've walked through the woods?"
After: "Could they've walked through the woods?"

All this (and more)—and I haven't even reread half the book!

*            *            *

Backstory solution – January 25, 2018

In my last post (January 20), I wrote about an objective reader's analysis of the first book of my end-of-the-world series, The Touchers. One valid criticism was that I don't provide enough information about my heroine's boyfriend, Blaine. However, I wasn't sure which details I wanted to add—and where I wanted to insert them.

This morning, while taking a shower (a great place for ideas for me!), the entire backstory popped into my head: The two characters would talk about where Blaine was when the cataclysmic event occurred and how he was able to escape. I found a good place to add the 250 words, a quiet scene near the end of the book when Blaine and Erin are walking together. I think the backstory works—and now I'm onto the next fix.

*            *            *

The objective reader – January 20, 2018

Until now, my end-of-world series, The Touchers, has been read only by me and a few people close to me. This kind of subjective reading results in lots of praise and not much criticism. However, in order to improve these two books, I need objective criticism.

I've spent the past week reviewing a beta reader's analysis of The Touchers (Book One), and in most cases, I agree with the comments. The reader pointed out times where I've lost my narrator's voice (The series is told in the first person by Erin, a teenage girl); several plot issues; and a number of mistakes, both minor and major.

I've been working on The Touchers series for years—especially Book One, which has taken forever—and even though I've read this manuscript many times, I've missed lots of things. That's why, before a book is published, it has to be read by objective readers.

*            *            *

Plot problem – January 15, 2018

I'd just finished editing 11 short stories and patting myself on the back because they're in pretty good shape. However, shortly thereafter, I realized that the story I'd just finishing reading, "The Imposters," had a major plot problem.

"The Imposters" is about a young teen who realizes her parents have changed in a major way—not outwardly, but personality-wise—and it dawned on me, after all this time (it was the first story I'd written of this new batch) that my explanation for this change didn't make sense.

Today I thought of a way to correct the problem and started deleting dialogue and rewriting scenes, not thrilled at having to remove lots of good stuff. But as I was ripping this story apart, I came up with yet another way to fix it—a much easier solution that didn't involve rewriting half the story. In fact, my new fix required just redoing a few paragraphs. And I think my changes work.

*            *            *

Book talk – January 10, 2018

I love talking about my writing and today I had the opportunity to do so as a guest speaker at the Yorktown Rotary Club's weekly luncheon meeting in Kirby's Grill & Bar.

I always begin by explaining how I got the ideas for my first two novels, DUST and Peachwood Lake, since both were inspired by newspaper articles (the former a tiny Internet post and the latter a front page story in the Sunday New York Times).

My next three books, however, came entirely from my imagination—The Disappearance (time travel), Corsonia (mind-control), and The Sea Crystal and Other Weird Tales (a mixed bag of supernatural short stories—everything from humor to horror).

I also spoke briefly about the creative writing process—and then we ate lunch—delicious burgers. I could do this every day, the writing part especially. (I'd weigh 400 pounds eating the food!) And I will be attending the Rotary Club's next meeting because Larry Berliner will be the guest speaker. Photos from today's meeting are in Happenings.

*              *            *

Too much information – January 5, 2018

"Write out of the reader's imagination as well as your own.
Supply the significant details and let the reader's imagination do the rest."
--Patrick F. McManus

I thought of this quote, which I had seen on Twitter a couple of months ago and retweeted, as I edited my latest short story, "George's Mother." When I reread this tale about a woman who claims to be a man's dead mother, I realized I was giving the reader too much information—explaining clues that a competent reader should be able to figure out without my help.

I eliminated two unnecessary details: an early conclusion that is now implied and explained at the end of the story and an obvious clue that I had needlessly spelled out. Both these omissions improve the story, making it more challenging for the reader.

*            *            *

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save

Save